First Writing Project- Shitty First Draft

Video Analysis Right now, the poles of the 2012 presidential election for the United States of America are at the starting lines of a race. The ability to determine the probability of success of each candidate can rarely be determined (if ever) by the ads published by each person’s ad team. Videos provided by these teams have minimal time on television to display their messages therefore they must use as much visual rhetoric as possible. These videos use statistic, statements to argue their case, visual lighting, picture, video clips, and speakers to demonstrate more than just what the text is saying. All these aspects are used to provoke the readers imagination and emotion ties to gain their trust and subconsciously gain their trust. The use of these aspects of the video are the most efficient way to gain the reader’s trust and is through images and text that evoke the mind in a way that gets them on the makers of the video’s side. This is why they use pictures and displays that are universal and widely accepted by the majority of the population thereby making the video much more popular and accepted. I found a video to analysis visual rhetoric and state it’s effectiveness, why it is effective, and how it appeals to the audience. The video I chose is one published by Mitt Romney’s campaign team that ashes Burock Obama for his assistance to china while our economy got worse. The video’s message, ultimately, is to portray Obama as a leader that cares more about the prosperity of other countries, than the one he is in absolute control of. The effects of this video are incredibly effective, at least to me, and contain what appears to be a universally accepted strategy that exemplifies that Obama is not doing his best job as president by using two bars representing the United States and China. The bar representing the United States goes down while the bar representing China goes up which to any American creates a feeling of doubt and worry. The two bars in the graph of the video are bricks, and each stack of bricks has a flag on the front (One being the American flag, one being the flag of China). The idea of our stack of bricks being depleted is a rhetorical visual that creates an emotional tie to all those who support the United States as our country is being metaphorically depleted. The most important aspect of the video is the text, it supports the connection that the demonstration has with the viewers and makes it stronger and more credible. Without the use of visual rhetoric the text would not appear nearly as effective as it would have just by itself. Without the elements used the video would be dull and meaningless to many of the readers. The least important to me is the background, although it sets the atmosphere, it has nothing to with the message portrayed by the video. The background could have been a more valid aspect of the video but instead was just used as backdrop, and nothing else. The color and style demonstrates an old fashioned look, which creates an atmosphere that says hard work and values is the foundation that builds this country. To me the atmosphere created by this video is half of what he viewer's first impression is based on, and my first impression was a good one. As the bricks decrease on the American side, the text is then reviled as if it was behind the stack the entire time. The next text is then portrayed on the front of the China side as it rises above the American side. This creates an effect that the text on the china side is something that doesn't want to be read. The text states that there were 582,000 jobs lost in the United States but there is also an increase in China manufacturing. The text demonstrates what’s happening with the stacks of bricks representing the USA and China. The statement is that China is excelling beyond what the United States is capable of with the current president in office which makes the argument that Mitt Romney will make a better president. Providing the information that Mitt Romney will make a better president supports the idea that we as a democracy have the right and the duty to make the right decision and vote him for president in the upcoming election. The video was made currently and the audience is the general audience of the United States that is eligible to vote. The flags on each bar representing each country provide pathos. The text on the bars provides loos. And the reference to the source of the information is the reference to ethos I for one found this video to be very effective in grabbing my attention and holding onto it until the video is over. Without the brilliant use of visual rhetoric, the video would be dull, boring, and would appear to be too long because anything past two seconds is too long. This video utilizes these visual rhetoric aspects through ploys that lead the reader’s emotions through a rigorous roller coaster through the video. Although the video may be fairly linear, it is still linear in the fact that the video is in control of the subjects mind and how he feels for the full length of the video. If he or she has his/her full attention on the video, then they have no choice but to be plunged into it. The editors and creators of these videos watch their product time and time again to make sure that every single detail is pinpoint and pointing in the direction they want it to go. I found that this video was loaded with visual rhetoric and was very effective. The use of each item in the video was clever, well disguise, and was not over used in anyway. The majority of the rhetoric used were undertones therefore made them nearly impossible to see without analysis.

Essay Questions

1. What are other places i can gain sources besides the video besides the video my essay is on? 2. What is the best way to show my readers my credibility on the subject when i am neutral follower of politics? 3. What structure can I use in my essay to grab the reader's attention and keep it throughout the essay?

Reaction to Muslim Rage Article- Busche

In this picture I got the vibe that “Muslim Rage” is almost a natural act in the world. The text at the bottom makes it sound like the person speaking is the surviver of a hurricane or a flood or some natural disaster that could not have been avoided in the first place. To me, the rage of the Muslim people had to have a cause, most likely the people that infuriated this group have a good reason to be hated against. People who are attached to suicide bombs, or have assault rifles, or plot against an entire nation don’t just have a bloodthirsty taste and want to watch the world burn- their hatred must come from some source of pain far beyond just a natural feeling. Obviously since we are the ones creating the problem, we should be the ones to fix it due to our obligation and sense of dignity and longing to be allies with other territories of this world. Instead of demonstrating this, we publish ‘offensive’ magazine covers, and hurtful texts behind it that only further strengthen the idea that we deserve to be hated against. Once we establish the idea that we aren’t perfect, and we enable other countries to have a stereotype that we think we are all-superior to any other country and stuck up, and fat, and we don’t care about anyone else- we can then begin to rebuild this connection with other countries and can further more strengthen the unity of all countries.

Paragraph on Visual Rhetoric for Writing Project #1

The two bars in the graph of the video are bricks, and each stack of bricks has a flag on the front (One being the American flag, one being the flag of China). The idea of our stack of bricks being depleted is a rhetorical visual that creates an emotional tie to all those who support the United States as our country is being metaphorically depleted. The most important aspect of the video is the text, it supports the connection that the demonstration has with the viewers and makes it stronger and more credible. The least important to me is the background, although it sets the atmosphere, it has nothing to with the message portrayed by the video. The color and style demonstrates an old fashioned look, which creates an atmosphere that says hard work and values is the foundation that builds this country. To me the atmosphere created by this video is half of what he viewer's first impression is based on, and my first impression was a good one. As the bricks decrease on the American side, the text is then reviled as if it was behind the stack the entire time. The next text is then portrayed on the front of the China side as it rises above the American side. This creates an effect that the text on the china side is something that doesn't want to be read. The text states that there were 582,000 jobs lost in the United States but there is also a 25% increase in China manufacturing. The text demonstrates what’s happening with the stacks of bricks representing the USA and China. The argument is that China is excelling beyond what the United States is capable of with the current president in office. The video was made currently and the audience is the general audience of the United States that is eligible to vote. The flags on each bar representing each country provide pathos. The text on the bars provides loos. And the reference to the source of the information is the reference to ethos

Rhetorical Analysis of Video for Major Writing Project #1-Busche

Bradyn Busche English 101-Dawn Diprince 16 September 2012  What visual elements grab your attention first? The two bars in the graph of the video are bricks, and each stack of bricks has a flag on the front (One being the American flag, one being the flag of China).  What other details reinforce that impression? How? The idea of our stack of bricks being depleted is a rhetorical visual that creates an emotional tie to all those who support the United States as our country is being metaphorically depleted.  What is more important? Less important? The most important aspect of the video is the text, it supports the connection that the demonstration has with the viewers and makes it stronger and more credible. The least important to me is the background, although it sets the atmosphere, it has nothing to with the message portrayed by the video.  What about color and style? What impact do they have on your impressions? The color and style demonstrates an old fashioned look, which creates an atmosphere that says hard work and values is the foundation that builds this country. To me the atmosphere created by this video is half of what he viewer's first impression is based on, and my first impression was a good one.  How does the image direct the viewer’s eyes and reinforce what is important? As the bricks decrease on the American side, the text is then reviled as if it was behind the stack the entire time. The next text is then portrayed on the front of the China side as it rises above the American side. This creates an effect that the text on the china side is something that doesn't want to be read.  What text is included? How does the text relate to the image? The text states that there were 582,000 jobs lost in the United States but there is also a 25% increase in China manufacturing. The text demonstrates whats happening with the stacks of bricks representing the USA and China.  What argument is being made? Consider: when this was made (kairos), who is the audience, what is the purpose (exigency). The argument is that China is excelling beyond what the United States is capable of with the current president in office. The video was made currently and the audience is the general audience of the United States that is eligible to vote.  List details that provide ethos, pathos, logos. The flags on each bar representing each country provides pathos. The text on the bars provides loos. And the reference to the source of the information is the reference to ethos

Précis Chap. 6 in ‘Choices’-Busche

Bradyn Busche

13 September 2012

Mrs. Dawn Diprince

English 101- Précis Chap. 6 in ‘Choices’

            In his sixth chapter of, “Choices 2.0 Situations for College Writing” (2010), Joe Marshal Hardin shows the proper ways to create a media critique through the genre, the ideal community of readers, the topic, the problem approach, and the Toulmin Method. Hardin supports his claims by demonstrating that the word ‘media’ refers not to just radio, television, film, music, and the Internet. It refers to print media as well such as newspapers, books, magazines, and outdoor media such as signs and billboards.  Hardin demonstrates the importance of each key points in a media critique. His purpose is to show the proper and most persuasive ways to write a media critique in a way that will connect with the readers in a way that couldn’t be done nearly as well if these techniques were used in an inappropriate way.  This, of course, is in order to allow the readers to create a stronger piece of writing. His audience is a base of writers trying to create a stronger argument, or more compelling and informative piece of writing through proper techniques, which they can establish by reading this book.

Plagiarism Lines Blur Précis-Busche

Bradyn Busche

English 101-Dawn Diprince

Plagiarism Lines Blur Précis

10 September 2012

            In the article “Plagiarism Lines Blur For Students in Digital Age” (2010), Trip Gabriel introduces the idea that the growth of the digital age has blurred the lines of plagiarism due to the fact that students don’t grasp that using worlds that they didn’t write is a serious crime. Gabriel supports these ideas by demonstrating several cases in which plagiarism has played a huge part in several scenarios in which declaring work as plagiarism is difficult due to the fact that there is so little premises to base an argument off of. His purpose is to inform people of the seriousness of plagiarism in order to persuade readers to stop plagiarism entirely or at least help support the idea that there are no right reasons to copy other people’s work. His audience is a base of writers that wish to learn about the causes and punishments of being involved with plagiarism and become more aware on the positive aspects of steering clear of copying others work.

Political Video Analysis- B. Busche

Bradyn Busche

English 101- Dawn Diprince

9 September 2012

Video Analysis

The Visual Rhetoric of Convention

            Both videos we watched that promoted Mit Romney’s and Barock Obama’s campaigns used music and clips in order to capture the viewer’s attention and lead them to support the subject of that video.  In Romney’s video, he used inspirational music throughout; with constant video clips of people succeeding at whatever activity they happen to be participating in the clip. Mit and his wife constantly speak side by side to emphasize the idea that family is the central drive behind his campaign. Obama on the other hand speaks separately from his wife to show a more formal and direct tone that to me means ‘we mean business and won’t let our emotional ties interfere with our political decisions.’  Mit’s video has several people speak in order to show his success in the small business fields to show that he can have the same success if he should be elected president.  Obama states all his successes while in office the last 4 years an states that he will strive to have many more accelerations in order to boost the economy back on top. Both declare that they will do what it takes to succeed while in office, but in order to have a persuasive argument both use these images and music in order to provoke the human mind and gain their attention in a positive way in a way that makes it appear that they have a peg above the other. In both videos I found their visual and audio rhetoric very compelling but didn’t do much to persuade me much more and have one set apart from the other. I’m aware that each video is analyzed time and time again to see what each and ever aspect of each video will reveal about the candidate it portrays.  I think if these campaigners really wanted to be sat apart from one another, they would do something spectacular- something that no one has done before that would completely change the game instead of just being another campaign video.

My Response to Both Political Speeches

Bradyn Busche

English 101: Dawn Diprince

5 September 2012

Analysis of political speeches

            First off, I did not support either speeches done by Ann Romney or Michelle Obama, due to the fact that neither speeches included near enough logos or ethos. Both women stated that the United States is the greatest country in the world, when statistically we are by far no where near that title. Both speeches were made in the intention to convince the audience in an informative structure that each woman’s husband is more fitting for the presidency than the other.  Neither speech, to me, was nearly convincing enough to lean my decision towards one side or the other; only give me more background as to why each candidate is there. Michelle took a more personal approach and stated how her husband came from a humble beginning and fought for what he had. Ann, on the other hand, took an approach in which she insists he audience that she wishes to speak about love and not politics. She basically lies to the entire audience due to the fact that her sole purpose of being there is to get her husband into the oval office for the next 4 years until she has to do it again. Both women state that they see the positive things about the United States that they see while traveling across it campaigning. All though they say this, the refuse to tell the negative things like the man in Pueblo that, when Obama was campaigning here, refused to let him eat in the restaurant due to the fact that he saw Obama as a vicious campaigner and had little moral value that he displayed to the general public. In my opinion I did not see any valid points in either arguments due to a lack of support by ethos or logos.

Rhetorical Précis-Choices, Chap.3

Bradyn Busche

English 101: Dawn Diprince

3 September 2012

Rhetorical Précis: Chapter 3 in Choices

            In his third chapter of, “Choices 2.0 Situations for College Writing” (2010), Joe Marshall Hardin demonstrates the proper structure of writing a strong piece of writing, which may include an argument, persuasion, or literary discussion. Hardin supports his claims by demonstrating an example of the proper structure, and the improper use of structure for an argument and letting the reader decide for his/herself which has a stronger appeal to the reader through structure and references to ethos, pathos, and logos. His purpose is to demonstrate the proper use of structural aspects (branding, dialogue, paraphrasing, etc.) in a way that clicks with the readers purpose of writing, therefore allowing them to create stronger pieces of writing in the future after being introduced to all important items suggested by the text. His audience is a base of writers trying to create a stronger argument, or more compelling and informative piece through structure by reading this book.